送交者: outsider 于 2005-12-28, 14:06:47:
回答: 老方的信，完全重写了第一段和最后一段，和改了些小错 由 xj 于 2005-12-28, 11:38:29:
A few things might need minor tweekings:
Paragraph 5: last sentence has the work "protect" appear twice. Try changing the second "protect" to "preserve"; "from the deprived land to more futile land", land apprears twice here too. Maybe change it to "places more futile" or something like that.
Paragraph 7: "the mainland China" should be "mainland China" without the.
Paragraph 10" inappropriate to be known by the public", hoe about just "inappropriate to the public"?