Two of those patients .. 最好不要用 those，而是把句子写完整一点，比如：Two of the patients interviewed by the lawyers ...

private, and for-profit 中间的逗号应去掉。

30% of shares 应为 30% of the shares

decided to dissolve itself under Dr. Xiao’s order 这句很怪，可改为 was dissolved as instructed by Dr. Xiao.